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第3章 分“照猫画虎”——控制性写作(3)

ashore 上岸 breed 繁殖shellfish 贝类动物

5.Write three paragraphs about sea lions.

写三段关于海狮的内容

Para.1: what sea lions are

Para.2: how sea lions move, what they eat and how they reproduce

Para.3: where trained sea lions perform and what tricks they can perform

Writing Activity 写作活动

Sea lions

Paragraph1 (controlled)

Fill in the blanks.

Sea lions are animals.They are .They belong to the as the .Most of them are found in the colder of northern and southern parts of the .The most common sea lions are the .

Para.2 (guided) Complete this Para.

Sea lions spend .They come and .They have no .They use and move .

Sea lions feed on .Like many other .The mothers feed

.

Para.3 (free)

Sea lions are

Model Passage 9

Our School Campus

Our school has a small, nice campus.Facing the school gate, there is a white office building.To the east of it is an old classroom building, and to the west is a new one, in which there is modern equipment.Inside the new building, there are lecture halls, sound labs and computer rooms.Behind these buildings is a large sports ground, which consists of a running track, a football court, two volley——ball courts and four basketball courts.Around the sports ground are a lot of trees.

Presentation

1.Read the passage carefully.仔细阅读范文

2.Read again and find out how to write a description about a school.重读范文并体会怎样描写一个学校

3.Try to describe your school.试描述自己的学校

4.Words, phrases and sentences are often used when writing a description about a school campus.

参考词汇

facing to the east/west/north/south

there is/arein front ofbehind

beside inside etc.

5.Write the parallel text according to the diagram below.根据范文的写作方法,描述下图学校的布局

Writing activity 写作活动

Our School Campus

This is a picture of our school——Zhongning No.1 High School.It is the in Zhongwei City.Entering the gate, on your right, you will see.

.On your left is .To the east of the office building are and to the west .Behind

, where students can read books.North of.To the east of.

Around the school.

Model Passage 10

Keeping Fish as a Hobby

Some people like to keep fish as a hobby.To start the hobby,you need to have a fish tank.When you buy the tank, make sure it does not leak.Get a tank large enough for the number of fish you wish to keep.

First, wash the tank.Next, fill it up with tap water.Let the water stand for a week.Then wash some sand and gravel to put in the bottom of the tank.Add some water plants and snails.If you can afford it, you may also want to get an air——pump and a filter to help keep the water clean.Now , finally, you are ready to put in the fish.

To keep your fish healthy, you must feed them well and keep the water clean.Fish eat dried fish food, fish bread and worms.Never give your fish too much food.The food that is not eaten will dirty the water.

Presentation

1.Read the comprehension passage carefully and retell it.仔细阅读范文,然后复述

2.Analyze the organization of the passage.分析范文的组织结构

(a)Content summary: only three basic ideas:

内容总结:三个基本点

The fish need a “home”.

(i)How to prepare the “home”.

(ii)How to keep the fish healthy.

(b)Paragraphing 分三段 Pay attention to how each of the three basic ideas is covered by a paragraph.

(c)Sequencing 衔接(注意如何使用衔接词连接一系列的活动,尤其第二段)

Notice how the key words are used to “tie together” the series of activities done sequentially, especially in Paragraph 2.

First,………Next,………Then……..Add ……..also ……… Now, finally, ……..

3.A drawing of birds in a cage, or if possible, a bird cage with birds inside.看图写作

4.The parallel topic: 仿写作文题目

Keeping Birds as a Hobby

Write the new text with the information in the table.根据下表信息写作.

PetHomePreparing the homeKeeping healthy

FishFish tank; no leaks.Wash tank; put sand and gravel at bottoms; add water plants and snails ,air——pump and filterGive enough food; keep water clean; feed with dried fish food, fish bread and worms.

BirdsBird cage; door shut properly Clean cage; put newspaper at the bottom; put in perch, food cups, water cup and bird bath Give enough food; keep birds and cage clean; feed with seeds, oat and give plenty of water; use cage cover at night to keep out enemies.

Writing activity 写作活动

Keeping Birds as a Hobby

Para.1.complete the sentences:

Some people like to .

To start the hobby, .

When ,make sure .Get a

.

Para.2.Write the second paragraph using the following key sequencing words:

First Next Then

Add also Now, finally

.

Para.3.free : Finish the composition in your own words.

Model Passage 11

Zhang Yong’s family

Zhang Yong’s family is a small one.There are only three people in his family.They are his father, his mother and himself.They live in Zhongning.

His father is a teacher of English.He likes teaching very much, and he works very hard and all his students love him because he is friendly and his classes are lively and interesting.

His mother is a doctor.She works in Zhongning County Hospital.She also works very hard and all her patients like her because she is very kind to them and her skills are excellent.

Zhang Yong is the only child in the family.He is studying in Zhongning No.1 High school.He loves science, so he often enjoys reading science stories, and he often scores high marks in science subjects.

Though his family is a small one, they are gay and happy.

Presentation

1.Read the above text carefully.仔细阅读

2.Write about your own family or follow the guidance to write: using simple present tense.根据范文的组织结构、段落和时态写自己的家庭,或按照下面的信息写作。

Title: My Family

A big family in a village,

Father and mother, work on the farm, sometimes do business in town

Grandfather and grandmother keep 10 sheep and take them around village

Sister and I ,(free)

Writing activity 写作活动

My Family

My family is a big one.There are .

They are and I.We live in a village .

My father and mother .They

.My grandfather and grandmother love sheep.They and to feed them every day.

My sister and I are students of Zhongning No.1 High School.My sister

But

.

记叙文

Model Passage 1

An Honest Boy

One afternoon Li Ping was walking home from school.On the way he saw a wallet lying on the road at a street corner.He picked it up and opened it.He found a lot of money inside.At once he ran back to his school and gave it to the headmaster.

The headmaster took Li Ping to the police station.The police officer praised Li Ping for his honesty.From the identity card in the wallet, the police found the owner and returned the wallet to him.

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